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ahhh~ this was so fun!! I know, so much proportion is way off and their hands are butchered messes but otherwise I really like how this one turned out ^^ I wanna color it...maybe I'll do that tomorow :)

anyone can color it if they like; maybe if enough people are interested I could have a little contest!

<3

from left: Alice, Art, Kylinn, Tage, Cari, Tasu, Gai

by the way, am I the only one that thinks it's RIDICULOUS that you have to have a subscription to request critique...? I mean, yeah, I know they need money to keep the site up but...oh well, best not to pout about it, eh? :3

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:iconmalle-chan:
nice!
I like the way you can see the personality of the characters :D ( especially the guy in the middle)
hope you have time to colour it because it will be great ^__^

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mad vampires are fun to draw ^___^
:iconpiratey-ninja:
I can critique WITHOUT a subscription! D: <
XD
Anyway...
This is so cute!

Now let's start!~
Tage <3 He's so weird! HOW is it even possible for him to DO that?!
Alright! Well other than the obvious reasons-unitoes?-, his face seems off.
If his face is viewed in 3/4 view his right ear would be hidden by his cheek.
And to me the smile is... scary. >_> It works for your style, though! Tage looks really cool!!

Art <3 <3 Looks so cute!
His shirt lacks the place of an armpit. His thumb lacks a little curve on the inside-other wise the hand is great! The slant where his hair goes out seems a little steep, like a tiny part of his head was sliced.

Alice- Her hair is BEAUTIFUL. Her fingers should curl around the loop of her bag. In my opinion her boobs are just a TAD too
';perky' XD (a little high up.) There's also barely indication that her knees exist.

Kylinn! She makes me want to ROLL IN JOY. You need a little more of a forehead. But don't worry about it too much. Her left hand though! The thumb should be on the OTHER side XD I made that mistake a couple of times. Make sure your thumbs and pinkies are on the right side!

Cari- Looks fat. XD That is all.

Tasu- Girl?? D: Girl. I'm assuming. The boobs aren't present though... Her knees seem to high- or her waist up is too short... It looks a little distorted.

Gai- His legs seem really short... His shoulders also small. Men's shoulders are usually broad, and the neck doesn't take up too much room on them. On the inside line of his right arm, I can't tell where his elbow should begin.

Other than that and the lack of sandy beach background, it's simply DARLING. <3 <3
Sorry this is so long >3< I like how they're all wearing ankle bracelets! Good job! You've made a lot of progress, and I'm glad you're not hiding the hands! A lot of people do that because they're afraid. XD

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NO! WRONG! I SAID IT'S;
Smiley faces, rainbows, and unicorns, BITCH!
:iconthelovelytabb:
ahhh~~ my eyes are watering, I'm so happy! I haven't had a good long-as-hell comment in so long...it's a good thing, trust me!! Thanks so much; some things I knew but was too lazy too fix, but others you've opened my eyes!

Like, for example, I knew there was something wrong with Kyle's hand, but I couldn't figure it out!

As for Art's armpit, yush, I did notice the weirdness but I was thinking, "hmm...his shirt should be a little damp so maybe it'd be more saggy" but anyhow the shirt ended up looking weird and I couldn't put my finger on it.

Now for Tage's face, you're absolutely right! I should add a piece of hair or something...seeing as it's all in pen. Maybe I should upload my sketches first, get critique, and THEN ink them.

As for Cari, I was thinking I could put on some baby fat since she's little, but I thought her thighs were a little big for such a little girl...what do you think?

Tasu, (lol what gave it away? the dress?) I was thinking maybe I should put some more...y'know, boobage, but her armpits were kinda stretching out on the sides to conceal the line that would have been her boobs. What I'm thinking is because it's one of those beachy banded dresses (that are wrinkly at the bust but stretch out), I could have drawn the wrinkles at her sides and stretching out where her boobs were.

For Gai, I was thinking the same thing. He looks like one of those strange, short buff guys...I was thinking that I'd just make his clothes fit long and baggy since that kinda fits his chracter, so his shorts are way past his knees...I guess it's not too apparent though so I'll need to remember that. As for his neck, ew, I just noticed it's too broad. neck muscle = disgusting. Also, just in case you were wondering, those worm looking things on his arm are veins. They looked like it on the sketch, but when I inked it something happened...xD

Thanks SO much for the critique, it really helps! I'm going to write down all of this in my little study book so I won't make the same mistakes twice! Thank you thank you thank you! <3
:iconthelovelytabb:
Heehee, thanks ^^ He was the most fun to draw, especially how impossible his pose is :3
:iconpiratey-ninja:
*nod nod*
Cari's legs DO seem a little big, but it's not too bad.

Tasu- Well it sounded like a guy name so I was confused. XD Oh, I know those kind of dresses! So it's like one of those situations where you have to put some kind of shading to make it look like the boobs are there! *nod nod*... Right?

Gai... kind of looked like those short buff Mexican boys! So cute <3
But yeah, too much neck muscle is a little scary. It does however show off in good ways too.

Yeah, I noticed the wormy lines. XD I was thinking about that for awhile...

*nod nod* Yeah! (I can't believe you have a study book XD )
Anyway... Have fun! :D Your welcome!

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NO! WRONG! I SAID IT'S;
Smiley faces, rainbows, and unicorns, BITCH!
:iconthelovelytabb:
Yup yup. They were bigger; I made them acceptable. Oh? Really? I always thought Tasu sounded more feminine. I think you were the one that helped me with that name. Yeah, yeah, one of those...? xD

eurgh...not when you live around, like, 1,000 of them and they all have buzzcuts... ew. I wanted to make him kinda buff, I mean more so than the other two guys but not all sick looking..He's supposed to be taller than Tage though. I think he looks shorter because he's leaning.

Well, at the beginning of the year my art teacher made us get books (mine's some old book about a racoon that I found in the back room) and treat a couple of the pages. So that's where I practice drawing stuff and take notes:

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:iconyukikosama:
I AM REPLYING CAUSE I FOUND TIEM TO. :O

I think it's a pretty nice picture, especially since there's so many people. But I guess that makes it hard to find references for it, huh?

The only really weird thing I see is that girl's (Kylinn?) pose. Seems really unnatural, especially how her hands and turned into that sideways position. Not much of a critique, though, because I can't put my finger on the exact thing. Maybe change her right hand so that's in a different pose?

Also, the guy's (Tage?) pose: priceless. xD

And yeah, you're not the only one who thinks the subscription thing is stuuupid. Everyone would want critique, and now you have to pay to ask for it? That's dumb.

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I wish that I was funny
I wish that I was creative
I wish that I was interesting

...And maybe then I can think of something to put here :noes:
:iconthelovelytabb:
ah~! what an honor!

:3 Why thanks ^^ Hmm, well I could always take pictures of me or my family in the poses. Well, except for Tage, seeing as that pose is pretty much impossible.

Yep, her hands were just killing me. I always want to kick myself in the face afterwards because I usually end up just winging the hands and they often look like crap. D:

Well, of course we can just critique like this but the little official critique thing looks so fun!
:iconyukikosama:
Nah, it's not an honor, it's more like, "Wow, you're not lazy!"

And, well, you never know with Tage. Sure, they might not be *smiling* per se, but they could still do that pose... maybe propped next to a chair or sofa, though. xD

BUT THE BEST DISCOVERIES COME FROM MISTAKES, SO YEAH, YOU TRIED.
At least you didn't hide them...

That ish true. :D
BUT NO ONE TAKES YOU AS SERIOUSLY WITHOUT THE OFFICIAL THING.
Not to mention that it's easier.

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I wish that I was funny
I wish that I was creative
I wish that I was interesting

...And maybe then I can think of something to put here :noes:

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